Poem: Feeling the Beat

Poem created in response to Poetic Bloomings’ “An Entertaining Summer” Poem-A-Day event

Day 13, July 13th

Prompt: Hot Fun in the Summertime

(form: pantoum)

Two versions:  Both have the same two stanzas, but the final two are different because my first version doesn’t quite fit “Hot Fun in the Summertime”.

Feeling the Beat
I could just feel the beat
creeping in through the walls
there would be no retreat
no slacking at all

creeping in through the walls
came the raucous chorus
no slacking at all
a huge crowd before us

came the raucous chorus
someone fired off a gun
a huge crowd before us
the violence was done

someone fired off a gun
there would be no retreat
the violence was done
I would soon lose the beat

version ii
I could just feel the beat
creeping in through the walls
there would be no retreat
no slacking at all

creeping in through the walls
came the raucous chorus
no slacking at all
a huge crowd before us

came the raucous chorus
at last I found the one
a huge crowd before us
we sneaked off for some fun

at last I found the one
there would be no retreat
we sneaked off for some fun
I could just feel the beat

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