Poem: Two out of three ain’t bad?

Poem created in response to Robert Lee Brewer’s 2014 April PAD Challenge: Day 21, 21 Apr 2014, topic:  back to basic

(form: cinquain)

Two out of three ain’t bad?

I try,
and fail, daily,
to get back to basics.
Reading? Math? Yes, but often fail
to write.

(original)

I try,
and fail, daily,
to get back to basics.
Always get to read. Often fail
to write

**I liked the flow of my original better, but I really liked the title.  Yes, I’m a Meat Loaf fan.  Also, it fit the fact that math is part of everyday life, as well as reading, but I frequently find myself not having written anything…nothing creative, anyway.  So Reading, Writing, and Arithmetic…the basics, the building blocks of education.  I get two out of the three, but wasn’t sure if it was obvious enough in the original poem what the basics were, so I made it more explicit in the revised version I submitted to the Poetic Asides PAD.  If you’re so inclined, drop me a note about which version you prefer and why.  Thanks.

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Poem: It’s not so pop to me

Poem created in response to Robert Lee Brewer’s 2014 April PAD Challenge: Day 17, 17 Apr 2014, topic:  pop culture

(form: trio of shadormas)

It’s not so pop to me

Pop culture
is mostly boring
me since the
eighties passed.
Inane and uncreative,
I find most of it.

Rehashings
of the past cultures
with new paint,
more smutty.
Celebs and regular folk
all facaded up.

Or maybe
I graduated
from high school
to adult,
cynical and unimpressed
with what’s popular.

 

**This is a slight tweak from the poem I submitted to the PAD Challenge.  I changed the fourth line of the second Shadorma from “and fake parts.” to what you see above.  It better reflects another aspect of what I find less appealing in today’s pop culture.